I don't understand why the light source strikes the top of the face all the way around to the far side, but barely even touches the edge of the mouth. If the light source is from the right, I don't see why there isn't more shadow on the side of the whale, and the highlight on the flipper opposite the light source is unexplained. also the mouth feels like it was tacked on the general body shape, it doesn't feel like it's part of the anatomy. the underlying anatomy just doesn't make sense.

Ive made it 2 years ago, but maby it would be interesting for you as a reference help:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5sUY9D-TK4Q especialy part after 2:40 min :)

Heh, I don't really have anything constructive to say; I just find it funny that I once made a purple space whale too.
Join the club, we're awesome. >.>

Or...put sharper teeth on it and call it a Space Piranha.
Seriously though, I kind of like it.  The shading on it's back(top) is a little confusing though (it shouldn't be there?).


Edited by dpixel - 22 June 2011 at 5:19pm

Very quick:

If you take criticism you don't agree with, it won't help you, even if it's right -- keep an open mind but stick to your guns. If the criticism is right, you'll grow into it in time, and no one can fault you for going at your own pace.
:)

You can do whatever you would like. Don't feel like you have to make a more realistic image just to please the people at PJ.

However, keep in mind critiques are never baseless. Even though you may not agree with a critique it doesn't change the fact that another person saw something wrong/ to be improved with the image.

Cure suggested you review whale anatomy, not necessarily to make it look like a real whale. Cartoons exaggerate the anatomy of their characters, so behind every good cartoon should be an accurate understanding of its anatomy. Hence Cure's critique, "the underlying anatomy doesn't make sense."
There are a lot of things that can be changed to make it resemble a real whale and keep it in the style that you're going for.

If you'd just use a reference you could see that the fin and eyes are out of place. The way you have the mouth open is also not possible for a whale; it resembles a human mouth too much, but that's where we can work with it to make it a cartoon.


I made a quick edit to illustrate my examples. The mouth still looks a bit strange and teeth like. You need an intermediary color between that yellow and the purple to replace the bright purple lines in the teeth to fix that.
Now it looks more like a whale without losing its style.

As for lighting, if the ship will have thrusters the obvious choice is making that your light source, since there would be no other visible light in space.

Hi guys! Not had a lot of time recently, school, life etc. all the usual reasons. Anyway, i tried to take on board what sooba said and i think it's improved quite a lot.



I still might change the teeth, but i don't know how well weird whale brush things could crush a ship? In the meantime, is there anywhere else that i should change? To me, it looks like the back fin needs to be a little pointier, and i might add that weird ribbed belly thing.

EDIT: Pointier fins, better/worse?



Edited by bannanawalrus - 23 July 2011 at 9:57am

I'm pretty sure I can incorporate a decidedly phallic candy island into there somewhere :') Although i'm pretty sure the blue one never ate any spaceships because she was bored ;)

EDIT: Other spaceship ideas:



EDIT 2: I liked the middle one.



Edited by bannanawalrus - 25 July 2011 at 4:55am

Probably not eventually, i just don't know what colours to do it, maybe chrome, or maybe yellow to contrast? but i hate working with yellow :/

I was thinking of Bubby too C:
I can easily tell this is a whale. It's very obvious. I do like it more after the eye and fin were fixed, but I think the lips actually give it personality, so I'm game for keeping them. I like the pirate style ship the most, I think it fits with the whale the best. A rocket ship makes the whale seem too random, but the pirate ship and whale in outer-space has a pretty cool vibe.